School: Blog 13: " In 'How to do one thing at a time', Nancy Jones explains that multi-tasking is bad and is harmful to the brain. Things like talking on..."
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The essay is a little bit short.In the first paragraph, you name Nancy, but you didn't make any hint who the person is.In the second paragraph, (and later on), you have realized this mistake, and by naming the author/ other source, your finish is much better.The claim shows up in at the end, which should look nicer in the second paragraph.
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